You have just gotta love Funminiyi's style of story telling... this is an excerpt from his story 'Amara'.
Please read and leave a comment to encourage my friend and egbon in this story telling business... :)
Please read and leave a comment to encourage my friend and egbon in this story telling business... :)
They sat beside each other on the cold cement floor, their
legs stretched out in front of them.
Amara stared at her legs. They had grown fat and lumpy, like
a woman’s own - a woman who had given birth to four or five children. And even
though her neighbor was farther gone, Aniekan’s legs on the other hand were
skinny like the rest of her. Her shoulders were bony too, extending into hands
like tree branches. Her arms rested on her big stomach, their long green veins evident,
straining against her flesh. Her head was hung on one side, an absent look in
her eyes.
“Are you okay, Aniekan?” Amara asked. The other girl did not
respond. She just blinked. She had not spoken for almost two days now. She just
sat there and stared, and blinked.
Amara got up from her sitting position and looked out of the
window above them. It was noon, and the sun sat lazily in the sky like an old
woman. An occasional bird crossed its smiling face, punctuating the laughter in
the compound beneath with loud squawks. Amara eyed the teenage girls. They were
all busy, washing clothes, sweeping, clearing debris, chatting and laughing.
Here was a nightmare.
She had thought that it was only children who could find
happiness in dark places. But she had come to find she was wrong. Here she was,
in a place where happiness had been wrested from the hands of every inmate,
yet, life went on as if all was well.
She wondered what was going on back at home. Were they
looking for her? Or had her father, after the first few frantic weeks, come to
terms with the idea that his daughter was missing and with a shrug, retreated
behind his endless newspapers? What about Ada? She was sure Ada would have gone
on with her life, with her provocative dressing and the reckless use of sexual allure
to fund her life and education.
The girls were really having a good time. She could barely
hear what they said because the louvers were shut, but one look at Oma, the tough
round girl with unmade wooly hair who sat on the pavement told Amara
everything. Oma who rarely mingled with the others was smiling indulgently at
the chit chat of the younger girls around her, filing her nails and spitting
intermittently into a gutter. Her
spittle was startlingly white, compared to her charcoal complexion.
“See this mumu? Na one thousan’ them take fuck you?” Oma
guffawed, pointing the piece of metal in her hand at Chinenye, an awkward girl
with a long thin face guarded on either side by hair weaved strong and erect in
black thread. Chinenye’s back was turned to the window and Amara could see she was
bent over a bowl of clothes, washing vigorously. The water in the bowl was a
dark color and had little lather. Beside her gritty heels that were marked with
Y-shaped lines like cracks in a wall was a mashed remnant of green bar soap.
All the other girls laughed at Oma’s jokes, more out of
deference than funniness. They all showed Oma a lot of respect because she was
the oldest there. They said that she had produced up to four - all of them male.
She was carrying the fifth
“I have saved some money.
Hundred thousan’,” she had told Amara on one of those rare occasions she had
been in a chatty mood. “After this one, I will leave and never come back,” she
had said as they sat on the balcony downstairs and watched a shooting star.
“Did you see that?” Oma asked, pointing.
Amara squeezed her eyes shut and palmed her boiling
forehead. There was a turbulence brewing there, and sometimes she felt as if
her brain was in a vortex, and her skull was readying to cave in, to implode on
her
“But, aren’t you worried? Amara had choked, ignoring the
other girl’s question. “I mean, about them, that you may never meet them in the
real life?” Her second hand was cradling her own swelling stomach. An inferno
had traveled down through her chest down there. She was burning all over. Tears
fell freely from her eyes.
Oma looked at her, then away. “Well, sometimes...” she had
replied, pensively. She had looked as though she wanted to add something else, but
then had shrugged it away. “You should do the same too. Have two or three, save
some money, then go an’ start your life afresh. Obodo bu igwe. Life is hard,
nwanne’m. You have to use what you have to get what you want.”
It was funny that was the same thing Ada had said to her
that night, six months ago.
Nice really nice... now I'm interested in knowing what's going on.
ReplyDeleteWhat happened six months ago?
soon and very soon... :) thanks for reading and commenting...
DeleteOh my God...this is lovely. White spittle vs charcoal complexion? I love the characterization, and the depth. I could extract a movie script, with the location et al fully inspired by this story. Thanks Funminiyi. You know you've got a fan in me. I enjoyed reading this.
ReplyDeleteSo what was Amara's story? These girls in birthing homes, they have stories you know. You wanna do a sequel? This just presented the frequent news of the birthing homes in the East and brought it right home. The young girls have parents, sisters, and maybe like Amara, feel guilt about giving up their babies.
Thanks again. Nice way to end a very stressful day.
I smiled throughout.
this woman...you have come here to steal our thunder....lol
Deletethe full story is ready...i just thought to tease y'all with the genius that is Funminiyi...
GREAT job funminiyi! Can't wait to see the whole story!
ReplyDelete'Stalkers Inc.' ...lol
DeleteSeems like this is about one of those baby factories. Great story. I liked it.
ReplyDeleteNice one..the sequel please.
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